Friday, December 02, 2005
Brings solace when one lies alone
With tink-tink-tink on twilight eaves,
The quiet tune when someone leaves.
By night the muffled shingle drums
Just patter on 'til daylight comes
Their soft percussive lullaby
That plays when someone says goodbye.
At dawn the drummer riffs some blues
Then packs it in, and kelly hues
Are more intense with final drops
And then at last the drumming stops.
The audience long lies awake
And wonders yet what small mistake
Or thoughtless word could so offend–
Then sleeps to let the sun ascend.
© 2005 Jeffrey Hull
It's VERY goodm in my opinion, and for that reason I want to tweak it so very much.
But my tweaking brain is exhausted.
Without a doubt, though, the final stanza is a complete masterpiece.